Character Analysis -- Thesis statements and 1 body paragraph

4/24/2012

Post your working draft of your character analysis thesis statement. Go here to find the youtube video about thesis statements:Under it, post your first body paragraph using the claim, textual evidence, elaboration model we've discussed in class.

DO IT THIS WAY!
Thesis: The nurse's loyalty to Juliet, in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, serves to fuel Juliet's irresponsible behavior. (end of your introduction paragraph)

Paragraph # 1

Claim: When the nurse speaks to Romeo on Juliet's behalf, she provides Juliet the opportunity to defy her parents.

Textual Evidence: In Act II, scene V, the nurse reports to Juliet the outcome of her conversation with Romeo, “Your love says, like an honest gentleman, and a/courteous, and a kind, and a handsome, and I warrant,/a virtuous—where is your mother?” (lines 55-57).

Elaboration: Due to the nurse's inappropriate involvement, Juliet makes the mistake of marrying Romeo in secret. A mother would not allow this, but the nurse's dedication to Juliet crosses a line that ultimately leads to Juliet's demise.

You must post your own reply and then respond to one other classmate. The person you respond to doesn't have to be in your same class period. You must write your first name and last initial and class period each time you post. Example: Shelia S, period 1. You must also use academic language. Absolutely NO texting abbreviations.

104 Comments

Joann K. Period 5

4/24/2012 12:21:35 pm

Thesis Statement
As the story took its course, Juliet proved herself to be a naive, young girl who hadn't been exposed to many things in her world as she in the play, was narrow-minded, dramatic, and incredibly loyal.

First Body Paragraph
In the town of Verona where this play had taken place, Juliet and Romeo had a romance that was sparked at first glance. The night they met was the night that Juliet forgot about his kinsmen and her own so they could be wedded. She didn't think wrong of Romeo even if they had only shared no more than a kiss that evening and only hold a grudge that his name must be Montague. "So Romeo would, were he not Romeo call'd/ Retain that dear perfection which he owes /Without that title. Romeo, doff thy name,/And for that name which is no part of thee/ Take all myself. " (Juliet Capulet, Act 2, Scene 2) Juliet had said wistfully to herself as she reflected after seeing Romeo. She would not see her kinsmen's hatred as anything more than a simple dislike of a name as "What's Montague? it is nor hand, nor foot,/ Nor arm, nor face, nor any other part" (Juliet Capulet, Act 2, Scene 2) and especially, since she had already created a pestanstal for Romeo so high that no one could touch him. As their romance continued after their marriage and Romeo's banishment, Juliet once again, proved to be closed-minded and could not be shaken from her stand of living without Romeo and living her life as Paris' wife. She would "rather than marry Paris,/.....bid me go into a new-made grave/ And hide me with a dead man in his shroud;/ Things that, to hear them told, have made me tremble;/ And I will do it without fear or doubt, /To live an unstain'd wife to my sweet love. " (Juliet Capulet, Act 2, Scene 2). These horrid actions she would take including sacrficing her own life, so she would not live as a wife to any other but Romeo or be in anyway, unfaithful to him. It was only Romeo that would keep her happy.

Ms. S

4/24/2012 12:38:48 pm

Your thesis is too unclear. You need to keep it concise. "Juliet's naïveté leads to disastrous consequences."

naïveté expression #1 and it's consequence
naïveté expression #2 and it's consequence

And so on. Keep it cohesive. Go back and watch the YouTube video.

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4/24/2012 12:22:53 pm

Meagan T. period 5

4/24/2012 12:51:28 pm

The Nurse is a sweet lady who cares deeply for Juliet, and the rest of the Capulets.

The Nurse if Juliet's conffient, because she took care of Juliet since she was a baby, and even breast feed her, thous forming a bond almost like a mother-daughter bond. The Nurse also cares for Tybalt, Juliet's cousion, not only because he is a Capulet, but because he was gentlemenly and kind to her. And we can see how much she cares for Juliet when she finds her 'dead' in her bed on her wedding day.

Theresa L. period 5

4/24/2012 02:00:26 pm

i think you are correct, the nurse is just like juliets mother. i kind of think that its weird that the nurse breast-fed her though....

Andrew I, Period 5

4/24/2012 02:02:52 pm

I like how you mentioned that the nurse formed a bond with Juliet like a mother and a daughter. However, you could have added a quote from the play.

Ms. S. ---EVERYONE READ THIS EXAMPLE!

4/25/2012 12:18:12 am

NOT quite there yet. Try to keep it concise.
REMEMBER YOUR THESIS IS YOUR TOPIC PLUS YOUR OPINION! IT IS ARGUABLE AND NOT A FACT!!! EVERYONE WOULD AGREE WITH YOU THAT THE NURSE IS CARES DEEPLY FOR JULIET.

Thesis: (working draft model) The nurse's loyalty to Juliet, in Shakespeare's ROMEO AND JULIET, serves to fuel Juliet's irresponsible behavior.

Claim: When the nurse speaks to Romeo on Juliet's behalf, she provides Juliet the opportunity to defy her parents.

Textual Evidence: (Get a direct quote from the play and put it here.)

Elaboration: Due to the nurse's inappropriate involvement, Juliet makes the mistake of marrying Romeo in secret. A mother would not allow this, but the nurse's dedication to Juliet crosses a line that ultimately leads to Juliet's demise.

Write it out this way. Post again.

Joann K. Period 5

4/25/2012 07:57:36 am

I agree with you that the Nurse is deeply loyal to Juliet as she went out of her way to ensure Juliet's happiness including see Romeo herself and even warning him of her mistress' innocence. I think that your body paragraph seems to be more like a summary of your entire essay since you had three evidence supporting your thesis in one paragraph. All of the three evidence is related but isn't connected enough to be in the same paragraph.
P.S And I know I'm not the English teacher on this website but you made a lot of spelling errors, Meagan.

rose yun per 6

5/4/2012 06:33:18 am

the nurse is the reason how they were able to be husband and wife, and at the end they were dead together as husband and wife

Alexis Venegas(Period 5)

5/5/2012 06:19:26 am

The nurse was pretty much the only one that was supporting their love for each other. If it wasnt for her, their love wouldnt have gotten as far.

Jacelyn Kong per 6

5/6/2012 02:25:11 pm

I agree with you, and like how Nurse has such a bond with Juliet. She acts more like Juliet's mother than Lady Capulet.

Alejandra E. period 5

4/24/2012 01:49:31 pm

Romeo, in Shakespeares Romeo and Juilet is an impulsive character who doesnt measure the consequences for his actions.

Romeo Montague is an impulsive character. He makes himself believe that he has fallen in love with young Lady Capulet at first visual connection. After that one night at the banquet he was determined to see her again and make his feelings known to her. "Did my heart love til? forswear it, sight! For I ne'er saw true beauty will this night." This quote clearly is an indication of Romeo's feelings towards Juliet. For Romeo it was love at first sight. He expresses how he had not ever seen such beauty until he layed eyes on Lady Juliet.

Ms. S.

4/25/2012 12:09:24 am

BEST one so far. It still reads as a draft, but that's okay. YOU are on the RIGHT track!

Vincent Wong, Period 4

4/25/2012 07:34:03 am

This is good, I'm going to use some of your concepts of Romeo in mine okay? This helped a lot, thank you!

Jaelene Decena Period 4

5/4/2012 04:16:04 am

This is great! I'm glad that you got to elaborate on the "love at first sight" and how they made such impulse decisions over it.

Michael C (Period 4)

5/7/2012 07:21:50 am

Thatsw a very powerful thesis.

Theresa L. period 5

4/24/2012 01:58:14 pm

Thesis:

Tyblat is extremly dangerous.

1rst paragraph:

Juliets extremly hot tempered cousin, Tyblat, is a extemly dangerous man. He tries to get his fights when he gets his chance. He will also kill a human being, if he desires to. Tyblat will not admit the truth etheir, which gets other people into trouble, leaving him look inocent. Tyblat is the most dangerous character of all in romeo and juliet.

Armando R. period 6

4/27/2012 07:40:14 am

I'd like to disagree with you saying that Tybalt would kill another person due to desire. I disagree with it because I believe he killed Mercutio because he's a friend of Romeo who's a Montague therefore Tybalt saw him as a foe with a smart mouth, but i do not deny the fact that he's dangerous.

Halie C, period 4

5/7/2012 12:51:42 pm

Tybalt plays an ambitious character. In Act 3 Scene 1, Mercutio comes on to Tybalt because of his taunting and insults toward him. He was the one who made Mercutio mad and want to get into a fight with him in the first place.

Andrew I, period 5

4/24/2012 01:59:44 pm

Thesis statement: The nurse's dedication shows her loyalty to the Capulets.

The word dedicated is almost ubiquitous this day in age. With most dedicated teacher awards and so called dedicated students, we have become accustom to the word and have forgot how powerful the word really is. Well, the nurse of the Capulets reminds us of what a truly dedicated person is like in Act 1 Scene 3. Lady Capulet says,"Nurse, where is my daughter, call her forth to me." After this. the nurse quickly calls Juliet and acts as a messanger even though she is a nurse. This shows us that the nurse is willing to do anything for the Capulets and will never ignore a request from them. Now I realize that nurses are supposed to do as they are told, but, few do as much as this nurse and even fewer don't complain. As you can see, the nurse's submisssive nature and attentive attitude show how genuinely dedicated she is.

Amanda W. Period 5

4/24/2012 02:26:13 pm

Romeo is a love addict to any girl he thinks is beautiful and wants their love right away, but for Juliet he never wanted to step away from her ever.

Romeo is a selfish boy who doesn't really care about anything he does as much as a rat with cheese. Romeo loved Roseline as if she was the only women on the planet, but when Juliet came into his world, it changed his perspective of everyone else. He didn't want anyone to take Juliet away from him and he begged her to be his girlfriend then wife. It all went by so fast that Romeo didn't know what he was up to. He married Juliet secretly so that he wouldn't cause nothing between his family and Juliet's family. Romeo never intended to die but he did it for his own wife.

kevin a per 5

4/25/2012 01:30:46 am

i agree with you i also think that Romeo is a love addict. He will fall in love with any beautiful girl that he sees right away

Justin C. period 4

5/4/2012 05:02:07 am

This is true since love can affect the way people act with eachother and they might do stupid things that they will regret later on but like you said, ROMEO is a true love bird

Nelson K. Period 5

4/24/2012 03:48:19 pm

Thesis:
The nurse is a loyal person to the Capulet's.

In the story, the nurse is very loyal to the Capulet's. She cares for Juliet by breast-feeding her when she was a little, even though she is nothing but a nurse. She knows so much about Juliet and her life that in act 2 scene 4 of the story, she talked to Romeo about marrying Juliet just because Juliet wanted to be with Romeo. She didn't care that they were from families that hated each, but that she wanted the well-being of Juliet.

Marcus Monserrat Period 5

5/4/2012 09:38:05 am

I think everyone knows that the nurse is a loyal person. I also think that you could have put more in your character analysis.

Nicke Y. Period 5

4/24/2012 11:57:03 pm

Thesis: Tybalt is a very aggressive character as Capulet in the story.

Tybalt shows that he is aggressive by being Hateful and Violent. He quotes, "...Fetch me my rapier boy. What! Dares the slave come hather, covered with an antic face, to fleer and scorn at our solemnity?...By stock and honor of my kin, to strike it him dead I hold it not a sin."(Act 1 Scene 5, pg. 757, 56-61) This quote shows that Tybalt has no remorse for Romeo. He says that killing a Montague is normal, and he thinks he should not be punished for it. His violence shows a ton in this quote because he thought of weapons like a rapier. He was also hateful because Romeo was a Montague, which was a Capulet's worst nightmare.

Kevin A per 5

4/25/2012 01:27:28 am

Thesis: Tybalt is a dangerous person

Tybalt shows that he is dangerous by being so violent.Tybalt tries to get in fights when he gets his chance.He says that killing a Montague is normal, and he thinks he should not be punished for it. Tybalt will kill anyone he wants to if he desires.This are the things that make Tybalt a dangerous man in the the whole story

Tri Tieu Period 4

4/25/2012 01:33:07 am

Thesis: Romeo is a very romantic and suicidal man because he does not care about what happens to him when he goes and find Juliet.

Body Paragraph: Romeo's is in love "Out of her favour, where I am in love. Act 1 Scene 1." He expresses his feeling and told Benvolio. Romeo is going to the Capulet's party to find Rosaline. Thats when he met his beloved Juliet. "Act 1 Scene 4,
[To JULIET] If I profane with my unworthiest hand. This holy shrine, the gentle fine is this: My lips, two blushing pilgrims, ready stand to smooth that rough touch with a tender kiss. "
Romeo exchanged kisses with Juliet and soon later was pulled by the nurse. That was when Romeo realize she was a daughter of the Capulets. "Act 1 Scene 5 Is she a Capulet? O dear account! my life is my foe's debt."

taylor kim period 5

4/26/2012 01:08:21 pm

I also agree, because Romeo's emotions are obviously fleeting from girl to girl until death.

Joann K. Period 5

4/25/2012 07:50:09 am

Thesis Statement
Juliet's naïveté led to her making choices based on her limited experience in the world.

Claim
Juliet made choices with an immature perspective of life

Evidence
"rather than marry Paris,/.....bid me go into a new-made grave/ And hide me with a dead man in his shroud;/ Things that, to hear them told, have made me tremble;/ And I will do it without fear or doubt, /To live an unstain'd wife to my sweet love. " (Juliet Capulet, Act 2, Scene 2)

Elaboration
Juliet would jump through hoops if it meant that she would remain forevermore with Romeo. It mattered not to her what was required of her even if it was stealing, dangerous animals, or even faking her own death.To her, life without Romeo as her husband, was not a life so if it meant being Romeo's wife, she would gladly die.

Amanda W. Period 5

4/26/2012 01:47:44 pm

It would have been better if Juliet hadn't married Paris because she didn't even love him the way she loved Romeo.

David Van Period 5

5/6/2012 11:42:39 pm

I also agree with Amanda that her parents should not force her to marry their friend. Look how brutally Juliet's father treated her when she declined to marry Paris

Cindy C. Period 5

4/25/2012 10:45:52 am

THESIS: Juliet is a complex character.

To begin with, Juliet is an emotional character. In the story Romeo and Juliet written by Shakespeare, Juliet is either happy or desperate. For example, on Act 2, Scene 2, Juliet said, " O Romeo, Romeo ! Wherefore art thou Romeo? Deny thy father and refuse thy name; or, if thou wilt not, be but sworn my love, And no longer be a Capulet." In this quote, it shows that Juliet would do anything to be with Romeo. It really shows how an emotional character she could be.

Yuanyuan Han Period 5

4/25/2012 01:28:57 pm

Thesis: In Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, Juliet is secretive teenager, who doesn't show her emotions and actions towards others often.

In the story Romeo and Juliet, Juliet is secretive teenager when it comes to love. Juliet falls in love with Romeo but she does not expose to anyone that she loves him. In addition, Juliet goes behind her parents' backs and marries Romeo in secret. Since Juliet's father is unaware of their marriage, he arranges a wedding for her and Paris. However, Juliet does not want to marry Paris and therefore drinks a potion that makes her appear lifeless on the day of her marriage with Paris. "My dismal scene I needs must act alone." This quote shows that she doesn't want anyone to discover that she is going to appear dead tomorrow at her wedding. As a result, Juliet is a very secretive girl and she hides her emotions and actions.

Cindy C. Period 5

5/4/2012 07:34:10 am

I agree with you because Juliet was secretive in the play and she does hides her emotions and actions.

Kristen W., period 5

4/25/2012 01:39:02 pm

THESIS: Juliet, in Shakespear's ROMEO AND JULIET, is an irresponsible character, as she makes some very foolish choices.

Juliet's rescklessness resulted in her own and Romeo's death. "Give me some present counsel, or, behold, /'Twixt my extremes and me this bloody knife /Shall play the umpire, arbitrating that /Which the commission of thy years and art /Could to no issue of true honour bring. /Be not so long to speak; I long to die, /If what thou speak'st speak not of remedy." This quote, spoken by Juliet to Friar Laurence, explains how Juliet was so desparate to not be married to Paris that she was willing to commit suicide. By drinking the remedy, she temporarily became unconscious, which led her family to believe she was dead. The plan was for Romeo to come straight to Friar Laurence when he received the news. However, he was so devastated that he decided to commit suicide. Because Juliet did not think of all the possible conquences of her actions, she caused Romeo's death, which in turn led to her demise.

Alejandra Espinosa period 5

5/4/2012 01:35:30 pm

Good thesis statement, Kristen. You made it clear and simple. I agree with how you say she makes foolish choices because she made her actions without realizing the consequences that could happen to her, her family and romeo and his family.

Anna Z, Period 4

4/25/2012 04:21:22 pm

Thesis:
Romeo, in Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet is a complicate character who doesn’t care about the consequences of his action.
Romeo change love easily. In the play Romeo and Juliet, Friar Laurence stated that, “God pardon sin! Wast thou with Rosaline?” (Act 2, Scene 3, line 44) Then Romeo stated that, “with Rosaline, my ghostly father? no/ I have forgot that name, and that name’s woe.” (Act 2, Scene 3, lines 45-46). This quote indicates that Romeo change love easily, because at first Romeo went to the Capulet Party, because of Rosaline, but after he met Juliet, he fall in love with Juliet by the first sight, and forgot about Rosaline afterward.

Marcus Monserrat Period 5

4/25/2012 10:34:48 pm

Thesis:
Mercutio is very careful of Romeo because sometimes Romeo does whatever he wants to do.

Body paragraph:
When Mercutio is talking to Romeo about how he is in love with Rosaline, but later falls in love with Juliet. Mercutio says to him "If love be rough with you, be rough with love". Since Mercutio was very protective of Romeo he started to be part of his love life about Juliet.

Nelson k. Per. 5

5/4/2012 05:32:46 am

I think that you added to much to your thesis.

Nicke Y. Period 5

5/6/2012 02:18:14 am

I think you should condense more on your thesis since it is a little too wordy and confusing. Also, the elaboration might need more information.

Michael Cheung (Period 4)

4/26/2012 08:36:31 am

Thesis:
In the story of Romeo and Juliet, the character, Romeo is very reckless and it leads him to his ultimate demise.

Claim:
When Romeo found out about Juliet's untimely (fake) death, he overreacted turning to no one for help or guidance of what he should do and quickly thinks up a plan to end his life with Juliet. That is when he goes to the Apothecary for the poison as a "desperate man" to join Juliet not knowing what he should actually do.

Textual Evidence:
Act V; Scene 1 (Lines 58-65): Come hither, man, I see thou art poor./ Hold, there s fourty ducats. Let me have/ A dram of poison, such soon-speeding gear.

Elaboration:
Though desperate and blinded by his own situation, he leads himself into a depressing death due to his recklessness. His recklessness has been showing throughout the story leading to many events like crashing the Capulet's party with little thought, infiltrating the Capulets home by going over a wall ignoring the consequences and killing Tybalt. So Romeo's death was all caused by his own recklessness.

Kellie B. Period 4

5/4/2012 02:44:03 pm

I believe that this is true also. Romeo shouldn't have been so rash and should have tried to keep their love a secret. They could have had more time to think everything through but he was reckless and caused their deaths.

taylor kim

4/26/2012 01:07:01 pm

thesis statement: In the story Romeo and Juliet, the character Benvolio is a light-hearted accomplice and friend to Romeo, throughout the story, he does things with good intentions, even if the outcome is not always favorable.

Body Paragraph 1:

claim: Benvolio is Romeo's cousin and friend. Loyal to the Montague house and to Romeo, he tries to help his cousin in times of need or distress.

Textual evidence: In Act 1 scene 1 Romeo has gone to be alone, and his mother is worried for him so she asks Benvolio to find him. Upon finding Romeo lamenting about his unrequited love Rosaline, he encouraged Romeo to move on and find another love, to cheer up and think of a brighter future.

"BENVOLIO

Be ruled by me, forget to think of her.

ROMEO

O, teach me how I should forget to think.

BENVOLIO

By giving liberty unto thine eyes;
Examine other beauties."

" Soft! I will go along;
An if you leave me so, you do me wrong. "

elaboration: Benvolio does what any friend or companion would do when a friend is in distress, try to help out an offer advice. In doing so he hopes Romeo would stop distressing over a fleeting love. He tries to help Romeo by doing things he think would make him happy.

taylor kim Period 5

4/26/2012 01:08:45 pm

Amanda W. Period 5

4/26/2012 01:44:06 pm

Thesis:
In the tragedy story of Romeo and Juliet, Romeo is a very selfish young man who falls in love with too many girls.

Claim: He was at first in love with Roseline which was pretty obvious that she wouldn't love him back. So Romeo roamed down the city like a confused dog in the big city. He then fell in love with Juliet which was a stupid thing to do because she was the enemy of his family.

Textual Evidence:
Act I, Scene 5, Lines 25-26
Romeo: Is she a Capulet?
O dear account! my life is my foe's debt.

Elaboration:
Allowing his heart to do most of the work, he falls too fast for the women or in this case teenager. Romeo needs to take it slow when it comes to love because there are endless possibilities when it comes to true love. He could be still in love with Roseline if it wasn't for Juliet. Romeo would probably still be in depression if Juliet never came into his life.

Sharon Lam p.5

5/6/2012 02:46:42 pm

I think this is quite true for he is selfish but i must add that he is taking things for granted

Sharon Lam(ngo) p.5

5/6/2012 02:58:29 pm

Vincent Wong, Period 4

4/26/2012 02:56:24 pm

Thesis: Romeo’s easily fell in love, In Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet, to the maiden Juliet whom cause Romeo to loose sight of reality for Juliet not knowing the consequences of his actions.

Body Paragraph #1

Claim: Romeo falls in love easily, but at first he was fallen for Rosaline, until he met the graceful Juliet which led him to the heart of his enemy’s household.

Textual Evidence: In Act II, Scene III, Frair Lawrence asked Romeo about his Rosaline, “God pardon sin! wast thou with Rosaline?” Romeo replied, “With Rosaline, my ghostly father? No. / I have forgot that name, and that name's woe. (lines 44-46)

Elaboration: Romeo’s naïve actions have gotten him involved with the Capulets causing his love blindness to overwhelm his own consciousness. He would choose to even put his life on the line for Juliet.

Stephanie Kuo, Period 6

5/6/2012 06:06:54 am

Romeo is just like Juliet, loving others so easily. For one thing, Romeo doesn't care for others when he knows that his first love is for Rosaline. I think that Romeo can be selfish sometimes. He doesn't think about other people's feelings but only himself and only gives those of his own feelings to Juliet.

Christopher Chinn, Period 6

5/6/2012 01:51:59 pm

He first loves Rosaline but doesn't care about her after Juliet comes along. He tries to rush into their relationship rather than Juliet who tries to be careful, but he doesn't care.

Jenny Ly, Period 4

4/26/2012 03:34:42 pm

Juliet, a character from William's Shakespeare's tragic play, "Romeo and Juliet", is portrayed as a typical teenage girl.

Juliet is at the age where she is bounded by maturity and immaturity. She starts off as a naive girl, she not being able to understand the concept of love, as she tries to fall in love with Paris to please her parents. She fails miserably as she instead decides to marry Romeo, though she is not as careless as Romeo in situations like these. Juliet is not only naive and cautious, she is also shown to be rebellious later on the story.

Aram Grigorian Period 4

4/26/2012 04:41:58 pm

Thesis- Tybalt's hot-headed behavior causes the story to shift to rising points and eventually a climax because of his attitude he exerts onto the Montegues.

Claim- When Tybalt and his fellow Capulets intercepted Benvilio for a chance to put him in his place, to prove the Capulets are greater than the Montegues.

Evidence- Act 1, Scene 1, meets a couple of Capulets and goes over to Benvolio to put him in his place."What, drawn, and talk of peace! I hate the word, /As I hate hell, all Montagues, and thee:/Have at thee, coward!" In this scene,

Elaboration- Judging from the way Tybaly is communicating with the Montegues, you can tell he is not fond of them at all. He hates the word "Montegue", it discussed him. Even though he is acting fierce, he still got himself handed to when Benvolio stepped up and took charge.

Armando Rodriguez, Period 6

4/27/2012 07:34:26 am

Thesis: Romeo's habit of falling in love ultimately led to his and Juliet's death.

Elaboration: If Romeo never felled in love with Rosealine and got his heart broken. Then, he'd never had went to the party were he first met Juliet. And he never met her then they both would never have killed themselves

Yusuf Bard

4/29/2012 08:26:56 am

Thesis: Romeo falls in love easily in shakespears "Romeo and Juliet". Romeo is very naive.

Claim: Romeo was first in love with rosealine until she had broken his heart. To ease his broken heart Romeo had roamed around the city to find his love "Juilet" whos family was nemesis to Romeo's family.

Texutal evidence:
Act 1, secne 5 lines 25-27

Elaboration: If Romeo didnt roam around the city that particular day he would have never met juilet, and both of them would still be alive.

Salina Valenzuela

5/4/2012 05:15:26 am

Yusuf,
your thesis statement is very true, Romero is very naive when it comes to loving her,
for example when he says . .
" she doth teach the torches to burn bright!
It seems she hangs upon the cheek of night
Like a rich jewel in an Ethiope's ear;
Beauty too rich for use, for earth too dear!
So shows a snowy dove trooping with crows,
As yonder lady o'er her fellows shows.
The measure done, I'll watch her place of stand,
And, touching hers, make blessed my rude hand.
Did my heart love till now? forswear it, sight!
For I ne'er saw true beauty till this night."
I think he fell for her way to fast.

Tommy H Per 4

4/29/2012 02:17:42 pm

Thesis: Romeo is a peacemaker because he tried to talk Tybalt out of fighting

Claim: Romeo didn't attack Tybalt when Tybalt was beating him to death

Textual Evidence: ACT III, scene I, line 63 pg 791
"Tybalt the reason that I have to love Thee. Doth much excuse the aooertaining rage to such greeting. Villian am i none. Therefore farewell. I see thou knowest me not.""

Elaboraton: Due to Romeo's feeling for Juliet and on violence, he dind't want to fight the Capulets. But Tybalt didn't like Romeo at all. he just wants them all dead

Richard Yip, Per. 4

4/29/2012 05:51:57 pm

Thesis: Romeo is an inexperienced teenager who acts without thinking clearly.

Claim: When Romeo becomes instantly in love with Juliet, it shows that he falls in love too quickly.

Textual Evidence: In Act I, scene 5, Romeo explains Juliet’s beauty after seeing her moments ago saying, “O, she doth teach the torches to burn bright!/It seems she hangs upon the cheek of night/Like a rich jewel in an Ethiope's ear;/Beauty too rich for use, for earth too dear!/So shows a snowy dove trooping with crows,/As yonder lady o'er her fellows shows,” (lines 41-45).

Elaboration: When Romeo sees Juliet, he expresses his emotions by saying metaphors comparing her to great many things. In that moment, Romeo is fascinated by Juliet’s beauty, not knowing how to do anything else. Romeo’s forbidden love will later cause deaths and problems for others.

Carmen L (Period 6)

5/2/2012 10:15:13 am

After reading your post, I see how Romeo is the one who caused the whole thing. If he didn't go to the party, he would of not met Juliet, and if he didn't see her. he wouldn't be obsessed with her and so on.

rose yun

5/4/2012 06:32:05 am

after reading your post. I can also use this on Juliet by carelessly/secretly
Arrington Romeo.

Anna Zhou, Period 4

5/6/2012 01:57:37 pm

I also used this claim.

Carmen L (Period 6)

5/2/2012 11:03:52 am

Thesis: Juliet is a bold, rebellious child that turned her life around.

Paragraph #1

Claim: She proposed to Romeo when she was on her balcony after the party.

Textual Evidence: In Act II Scene II, Juliet told Romeo to be at the church and to send for her, "If thy bent of love be honorable,/ Thy purpose marriage, send me word tomorrow,/By one that I'll procure to come to thee,"(lines 143-145).

Elaboration: Juliet proposed to Romeo even though she knew he was a Montague and that her family would strongly disapprove. This proves that she also took part of leading her ending to a tragic one with Romeo.

Jaelene Decena Period 4

5/4/2012 04:13:30 am

Thesis: Romeo is a teenage boy conflicted with emotions that causes dramatic changes in his life.

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Claim: Romeo's new found love has changed his view on the Capulets.

Textual Evidence : ACt 3 scene 1 " I do protest I never injured thee but love thee better than thou canst device,"....."Draw Benvolio, beat down their weapons, gentlemen for shame this outrage"

Elaboration: Because of Juliet, Romeo has found peace and doesn't see a need to fight and kill the Capulets. His calm emotions quickly change when Tybalt kills one of the Montagues. Romeo changes from a depressed soul, into a peace maker and changes back into a monster. His anger leads to the death of Tybalt, a life for a life, and later pays the price. Romeo hasn't found a way to control his feelings and emotions which leads him to make poor, impulse choices.

Yusuf Bard Period 5

5/6/2012 10:58:25 pm

Jaelene my character was also romeo are very emotional and unique teenager. i do admit that Romeos emotions do have dramatic changes. for example how tybalt killed benovillo then out of rage romeo killed tybalt in the rage of the momemt should really think before he does anything

Justin C. Period 5

5/4/2012 05:22:01 am

Thesis: Benvolio is a very cautious character
Claim: Benvolio is curious about Romeo's love life.
Evidence: Act 1 Scene 1 line 199 "tell me in sadness, who is that you love?"
Elaboration: Since Bevolio is Romeo's cousin, he cares about his love life and also. , he naturally has a mantality to act curious and be nosy. Romeo comes to Benvolio sad so it makes Benvolio cruious to ask what the problem was. Romeo thinks he knows all about love and that love is the only thing to live for so Benvolio solves his problem by talking it out.

Kellie B. Period 4

5/4/2012 02:39:35 pm

Thesis: Juliet is very childish character who tries to act older than she really is.

Claim: Even though Juliet had barely met Romeo, she was already head over heels for him.

Textual Evidence: In act II, scene II, Juliet is on her balcony taking to herself about her love for Romeo. "O Romeo, Romeo! Wherefore art thou Romeo? Deny thy father and refuse they name; or if thou wilt not, be but sworn my love, and I'll no longer be a capulet." (lines 33-36)

Elaboration: Within the couple of hours Juliet had known Romeo, she had fallen in love with him. She wants to be with Romeo, even marry him before she learns anything about his character. She's foolish because she thinks that she knows what love is when she's only 13, especially under these circumstances.

Stephanie Kuo, Period 6

5/6/2012 06:03:43 am

Juliet is a very childish character, much like a little kid pretending to be in love. But then again, her love is actually serious. It's just impossible for someone to be in love with a stranger that you have never seen.

Matthew L P5

5/5/2012 02:12:56 pm

Thesis: Romeo is a desperate person.

In the beginning of the play Romeo was heart broken because Rosaline rejected him. But at the dance, Juliet catches his eyes and they fall in love at first sight. Romeo forgets everything about Rosaline and finally moves on. Romeo seems like a desperate person to just fall in love with the next girl that catches his eyes. He would probably be even more depressed if Juliet did what Rosaline did.

Yusuf Bard Period 5

5/6/2012 11:00:16 pm

Matthew i do not agree with you at all. Romeo is not a desprate man, he is just very emotional but i can understand why you think his a desprate man.

Stephanie Kuo, Period 6

5/6/2012 05:04:17 am

Thesis: The nurse in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, is a loyal and sweet woman.

Stephanie Kuo

5/6/2012 05:06:41 am

Ms sutton? Can you delete this because I made a mistake. I pressed submit on accident.

Stephanie Kuo, Period 6

5/6/2012 06:00:16 am

Thesis: The nurse in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet is a loyal and sweet woman.

Claim: She supports Romeo and Juliet’s love in marriage. She is also similar to Romeo's Friar Laurence, who also helped made Romeo and Juliet's marriage to be official. As to being loyal, the nurse obeyed Juliet as to not speak ill of her husband.

Textual Evidence:
MOTHER TO JULIET/WET NURSE: Act 1, Scene 3 “Peace, I have done. God mark thee to his grace!
Thou wast the prettiest babe that e'er I nursed:
And I might live to see thee married once,
I have my wish.”
SWEET: Act 2, Scene 5 “Now, good sweet nurse,--O Lord, why look'st thou sad?
Though news be sad, yet tell them merrily;
If good, thou shamest the music of sweet news
By playing it to me with so sour a face.”
LOYAL: Act 3, Scene 2 “O Tybalt, Tybalt, the best friend I had!
O courteous Tybalt! honest gentleman!
That ever I should live to see thee dead!”

Elaboration: The nurse helps out Juliet, thinking that she would be happy if it all ended well. She went along with the plan of Friar Laurence but she doesn’t know that Juliet was faking her death, which leads into devastation when it did not go well.

Paragraph #1: The nurse in Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet is like a mother to Juliet. She took care of her ever since birth, since her biological mother seems to be too busy to take care of her. She is comical, loyal, and sweet. The most important thing is that she is honest. This is how she gets her trust from Juliet and the rest of the Capulet household. While believing in love and marriage, she approves of Juliet’s love for Romeo, more like a love at first sight. I think that the nurse is very kind loves Juliet so much to be able to obey Juliet without hesitation, knowing that Juliet is very kind. The nurse is loyal and sweet and serves her role as a confidante for Juliet.

Leanne Deng, Period 4

5/6/2012 08:11:14 am

Thesis: Romeo is a typical teenager that falls in love easily.

Claim: When Romeo was mourning over breaking up with Rosaline, it shows that he is a typical teenager who got dumped.

Textual Evidence: In act 1 scene 2 Romeo's parents were describing how tired and sad he looks after Romeo and Rosaline broke up. Romeo's father said, "Many a morning hath he there been seen,
With tears augmenting the fresh morning dew.
Adding to clouds more clouds with his deep sighs;
But all so soon as the all-cheering sun
Should in the furthest east begin to draw
The shady curtains from Aurora's bed,
Away from the light steals home my heavy son,
And private in his chamber pens himself,
Shuts up his windows, locks far daylight out
And makes himself an artificial night:
Black and portentous must this humour prove,
Unless good counsel may the cause remove."

Elaboration: Romeo is sad and couldn't get over Rosaline so everyday he would just stare into space with a sad expression on his face.

Peter K, Period 6

5/6/2012 11:37:13 am

I do believe that what you posted is a great example to show that Romeo is like one of the typical teenage boys who can easily fall for other women easily. I think it would have been better if you included how Romeo would stalk Rosaline and eventually meet Juliet.

Grace L., Period 5

5/6/2012 09:51:04 am

Thesis: In Shakespeare's ROMEO AND JULIET, Friar Laurence is an ignorant character whose actions results in the deaths of Romeo and Juliet.

Claim #1: Friar Laurence agreed to marry Romeo and Juliet only because he hoped it would result in the end of the feud between the Capulets and the Montagues.

Textual Evidence: In Act II, Scene III, Friar Laurence clearly tells Romeo, "In one respect thy assistant be/For this alliance may so happily prove,/To turn your households' rancour to pure love" (lines 90-93).

Elaboration: The Friar didn't even believe that Romeo was in love with the Capulet's only daughter, never mind think of marrying Romeo and Juliet until he thought of the possible outcome that would result from the marriage. He gave his consent without thinking about what Romeo or Juliet's parents would say because he only thought about the best possible result- the end of the feud between the two households. His ignorance to all of the possible consequences results in the marriage that starts a chain reaction that ultimately leads to the deaths of Romeo and Juliet.

Jennifer, U. per. 6

5/6/2012 09:53:21 am

Thesis: Romeo's passion prevented him from acting wisely

Claim :One way Romeo proves himself as unwise is when he sneaked into the garden of his enemy, risking his life just to see Juliet.
Evidence: Romeo see Juliet on her balcony and says," But, soft! What light through younder window breaks?/ It is the east, and Juliet is the sun/.....That thou her maid art far more fair than she."(Act 2, Scene 2).
Elaboration: In this quote Romeo is so focused on Juliet, his new found love, that he forgets that he is in enemy territory.

Sally C., Per 6

5/6/2012 12:35:41 pm

I agree with Jennifer because he only did focus on Juliet and if they got caught, bad things would happen like death for Romeo and punishment for Juliet.

Bridget Ho, period 6

5/6/2012 02:05:32 pm

whaddap Jennifer! I mean, hello Jennifer. :) I DISagree with you because I don't think Romeo was unwise for going into the garden, it shows that he really loves her and was willing to take a risk to see her.

Peter K, Period 6

5/6/2012 11:29:46 am

Thesis: Benvolio, though good-natured and soft, played no role in helping his friends, Romeo and Mercutio.

Claim: He was powerless to stop Mercutio from getting killed and Romeo from killing Tybalt.

Evidence: In Act III, Scene I, Mercutio fought Tybalt despite Benvolio pleading, "Either withdraw unto some private place, And reason coldly of your grievances, Or else depart; here all eyes gaze on us."

Elaboration: Because of Benvolio's unwise ways of trying to solve the problems he faces, he eventually leads Romeo back to Juliet thinking that she is actually dead.

Sally C, Per 6

5/6/2012 12:33:29 pm

Thesis: Romeo's unwise decisions led him to his and Juliet's death.
Claim: Romeo intuitive decides to commit suicide when he sees Juliet laying on her death bed which is a terrible mistake.
Evidence: In Act 5, Scene 1, Romeo decides to drink the poison with the lines, "There is thy gold, worse poison to men's souls, Doing more murders in this loathsome world, Than these poor compounds that thou mayst not sell. I sell thee poison; thou hast sold me none. Farewell: buy food, and get thyself in flesh.
Come, cordial and not poison, go with me, To Juliet's grave; for there must I use thee."
Elaboration: Romeo should not have decided to drink the potion and get past this stage in life so therefore it is a unwise decision. Romeo should also learn to think about the consequences and he needs to think twice about what he does. He was too blinded by Juliet's death.

Michael Y. Period 6

5/6/2012 01:09:15 pm

This is a fact, not an opinion. I would try to reword this thesis in order to include an opinion.

Michael Y. Period 6

5/6/2012 01:04:26 pm

Thesis: Romeo is too easily controlled by his emotions.

Claim: Romeo does not have the willpower to think rationally when under the pressure of intense emotions.

Textual Evidence: In Act 3, Scene 1, Romeo says "Alive, in triumph! and Mercutio slain! away to heaven, respective lenity,
and fire-eyed fury be my conduct now!"

Elaboration: As he said, Romeo was guided by "fire-eyed fury" rather than rational thought. He didn't pay any mind to the consequences to challenging Tybalt. Whether or not he or Tybalt survived did not matter because if Tybalt died, he would be banished. If Romeo died, they would be separated forever.

Shanni C,Period 6

5/6/2012 01:15:03 pm

Thesis: Juliet is a typical young girl that falls in love at first sight.

Claim: Romeo and Juliet saw each other at the Capulet's party and each is proclaiming their love for the other within a very short space of time.
Textual Evidence: Juliet is very anxious, she couldn't wait to see romeo again and she said, "At what o'clock tomorrow shall I send to thee?"(act 2 scene 2)
Elaboration: Juliet is a beautiful girl who falls in love easily. She respects her elders and is kind to others but is also very childish when in love with Romeo. Juliet is the kind of girl who would never betray anyone that treasures her the most.

Christopher Chinn, Period 6

5/6/2012 01:48:37 pm

Thesis: Romeo is a peacemaker, falling in love with Juliet, but even as trouble approaches him and juliet he tries to still make peace with Tybalt which eventually causes many deaths in the end.

Claim: When Tybalt tries attacking him, he still tries to make peace even after he brutally beats him up, and kills Mercutio.
Textual Evidence: Romeo wouldn't stop trying to make peace between the families, he says "I do protest I never injured thee, But I love thee better than thou canst devise...which name I tender as dearly as mine own, be satisfied."(act 3, scene 1)
Elaboration: Romeo is a boy who is not a violent one, he cares about peace rather than violence, he talks instead of fighting, respecting everyone and seeing the good in them.

Richard Lai (Period 6)

5/8/2012 11:14:06 am

I agree with you, Romeo tried to make peace with Tybalt to stop the fighting between the families.

Bridget Ho, period 6

5/6/2012 02:00:11 pm

Thesis: Romeo, in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, is an immature person

Claim: all he wants is to make love to her

Textual Evidence: In act 2, scene 2, Romeo says "O, wilt thou leave me so unsatisfied?"

Elaboration: When Juliet had to leave Romeo cause the Nurse was calling her, he asked her why is she leaving him unsatisfied. That meant that he wanted to make "love" with her before she left. Juliet wanted to take their love slowly. Romeo is immature and foolish because of the things he says to Juliet.

Kylie Mah Period 6

5/7/2012 07:52:09 am

i agree with you Bridget. Romeo is an immature person.

Joanna Van Period 6

5/6/2012 02:05:38 pm

Thesis: Romeo's immature actions leads him to become banish and death.

Claim: When Tybalt killed Mercutio, Benvilo was trying to convince Romeo not to do anything to Tybalt but Romeo didn't listen and soon he kills Tybalt and he was banished.

Textual Evidence: In Act 3 Scene 1 lines 75 -99, Romeo saw Mercutio death and had to go find Tybalt to get revenge, while Benvilo convincing Romeo not to do anything. at the end Romeo says "O, I am fortune's fool! " He regrets fighting with Tybalt.

Elaboration: Since Romeo didn't want to listen to anyone. he becomes banish, which means that he can't see his wife, Juliet anymore. He ask Friar Lawrence for help and he did help him. This all started because Romeo immaturity was involved and he made all the chaos.

Peter G P5

5/6/2012 02:16:29 pm

Thesis: Nurse is a kind and caring person.

The nurse cares for Juliet in a lot of ways. She helps her with the marriage with Romeo. She even breast fed Juliet when she was a infant. She's more caring than Juliet's parents and understands her more.

Karen Lieng

5/6/2012 02:50:41 pm

Thesis: Juilet is a typical teenager.

Claim:Juilet is a girl who is implusive, self concious about her choices, and very secretive

Text. Evidence: During the Capulet's party, Romeo and Juilet meet for the first time. And when Romeo wanted to kiss her, Juilet let him! Which makes her very implusive. But in Act 2 Scene 2, Juilet was self concious about the relationship between Romeo and herself. Instead of being secretive about marrying Romeo, Juilet should have came to her senses and should have asked for help.

Elaboration: Due to Romeo's persitance, Juilet finds herself lying to her parents about her whereabouts with a boy that she would met for a day!

Karen Lieng (period 4)

5/6/2012 10:46:37 pm

period 4 ^^

Sharon Lam (Ngo) P.5

5/6/2012 03:06:35 pm

Thesis: Benvolio is a very curious young man.

Paragraph: Benivolio a very curious young man always seeks for anwsers to things that he probably have no use for. In Act 1 Scene 1 Line 144 " My noble uncle, do you know the cause." This is one way of seeing how he is seeking anwsers. In Act1,Scene 1,line 163 " What sadness lengthens Romeo's hours?" He is asking for Romeo's feelings. This is another form of Benivolo curiousness.

David Van Period 5

5/6/2012 11:41:00 pm

Thesis: Romeo is a very immature person

Claim: All he wants to do is spoil Juliet, nothing else

Paragraph: Romeo is a very immature person who always tries to make out with Juliet. Even during the first time they met, they decided to make out with each other. During the bed scene, when Juliet told Romeo to leave, he told her that he wants to continue making out with her. He ended up making a fool of himself for his immature acts.

Kylie Mah Period 6

5/7/2012 07:49:25 am

Thesis: The nurse is an irresponsible confidant.

Claim: The nurse let Juliet marry Romeo behind her parents back, knowing about their love affair.

Textual Evidence: Act 2, Scene 5 "Then hie you hence to Friar Laurence' cell; There stays a husband to make you a wife:"

Elaboration: Letting Juilet marry Romeo and becoming his wife made the nurse irresponsible because she helped encourage Juliet to continue seeing Romeo which eventually lead her to Juliet's death. If the nurse was a responsible confidant, she would have stopped Juliet from seeing and contacting Romeo the first day they met each other.

Halie C, period 4

5/7/2012 12:42:46 pm

Thesis: Juliet's character portrays a childish and irresponsible teenage girl.
Claim: The decisions that Juliet makes are rebellious and idiotic.
Textual evidence: In Act II Scene II, Juliet says, 'O Romeo, Romeo. Wherefore art thou Romeo? Deny thy father and refuse thy name; or if thou wilt not, be but sworn my love, and i'll no longer be a Capulet.' The fact that she is willing to get rid of a part of her identity just for a guy she hardly even knows is idiotic. Also, because she is going against the rules by falling in love and being interested in a Montague, makes her rebellious. She is also irresponsible because she falls in love with Romeo, who could be a genuinely bad person, but yet she trusts him so deeply.

Rose Yun per 6

5/7/2012 01:17:50 pm

Juliet's idea to drink the potion was the reason why in the end both of them died.

When Romeo saw that Juliet was lying on her coffin, he drank the poison. However, soon after that she awoke and saw Romeo next to her dead.

If Juliet hadn't drank the potion, then Romeo wouldn't see her "dead" and kill himself. If Romeo had saw Juliet was still alive, then he wouldn't have drank the potion after wanting to die with Juliet. They both had a chance to win, but her recklessness to be with Romeo, even if there was the slightest chance, her decision caused them to die

Xian Feng period 6

5/7/2012 01:18:41 pm

Mercutio changes has mood really quick.

At act 2 scene 4 More than prince of cats, I can tell you. O, he is
the courageous captain of compliments....................

One minute Mercutio was having fun making fun a Tybalt and afterwards he got mad very quick. So Mercutio taunted Tybalt into a fight by calling him "prince all of all cats". Which ended his life.

Diana Tran, Period 4

5/7/2012 01:54:35 pm

Thesis: Throughout the play, the way that Juliet is portrayed shows that she has transformed from a faithful, innocent girl into a rebellious, secretive person.

Claim: In the beginning of the play, Juliet is a sweet, respectful young lady towards everyone, especially her family. The way she answers and speaks so courteously towards everybody makes her seem like an excellent character.

Textual evidence: Act 1, Scene 3

Line 7-9: JULIET
How now! who calls?
Nurse
Your mother.
JULIET
Madam, I am here.
What is your will?

Line 70-73: LADY CAPULET
Marry, that 'marry' is the very theme
I came to talk of. Tell me, daughter Juliet,
How stands your disposition to be married?
JULIET
It is an honour that I dream not of.

Elaboration: The way that Juliet discusses marriage with her mother and her nurse shows that she is respecting what her mother is encouraging her to do. Yet, Juliet is rejecting it. When Juliet explains a negative, she has a pro and con.

Richard Lai (Period 6)

5/8/2012 11:10:42 am

Thesis:
Romeo is a immature person.

Claim:
Romeo wants to get married with Juliet.

Textual Evidence
Line 127
"The exchange of thy love's faithful vow for mine."

Elaboration:
Romeo wanted to get married after they made love even though it was his first day seeing her.

Ezra K. Period 6

5/8/2012 12:50:25 pm

Thesis:
Romeo's immaturity led to dire consequences.

Claim:
Romeo's love at first sight is an indication of his need for attention.

Textual Evidence:
In sadness, cousin, I do love a woman.

Elaboration:
This was on the day before he fell in love with Juliet. His immaturity is clear in that, he doesnt know what love is. He changed his mind so easily

Peter Tiet Period 6

5/15/2012 02:28:58 pm

Thesis: Romeo's choices made both Juliet and himself doomed.

Claim:Romeo choose to continue to love Juliet regardless that they are enemies and doing it without thinking of the consequences.

Textual Evidence:Is she a Capulet?
O dear account! my life is my foe's debt (Act 1 Scene 5)

Elaboration: Because of the mistakes Romeo had taken not only he continue to love Juliet but also made Juliet defy her father and try to avoid Paris marriage.Then lead to troubles later on.

Carmen M, Period 6

5/20/2012 08:19:33 am

Thesis: Friar Lawrence ignites the horrible events that result in the tragic deaths of Romeo and Juliet.

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Claim: Friar Lawrence’s first act in evoking the series of unfortunate events of Romeo’s and Juliet is when he marries them.

Textual Evidence: “Come, come with me, and we will make short work; For, by your leaves, you shall not stay along/Till holy church incorporate two in one” (Act II, Scene VI, lines 35-37).

Elaboration: This wedding takes place without the knowledge or consent of either of their parents. Instead of being a proper adult figure and asking the young lovers to consider the consequences of doing so, the friar agrees to marry them all too quickly. He does this in the hopes of resolving their century-long family feud.

Juliet Oemor

5/11/2014 06:08:53 am

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